My rating: 2 of 5 stars
Book #2 of G. Bailey’s A Demon’s Fall series follows Evie as she awakens in a world full of white after being stabbed by her sister while in hell. To be honest she was surprised that she woke up at all, never one to look a gift horse in the mouth however, she gets on with things. Meanwhile, the protectors are keeping Hali hidden in a safe house while, along with Azi, mourning their loss. When Azi gets news of what happened and where Evie is, things take a turn for the interesting as he promises to bring her back.
I read the first book in this series after winning it in a competition held on the author’s facebook readers group. I found the story to be interesting enough, but the writing left a lot to be desired. I had high hopes that the writing in the following books would show an obvious evolution as the author grew and learnt more, but I was sorely disappointed. I do know that Bailey puts out a LOT of books out, she churns them out quite fast so I can kind of understand why I didn’t see to much difference in voice of the author, but it still disappointed me. As with the first story, I found the writing to be a tad juvenile, especially considering this series is a reverse harem series that is directed at the 18+ age bracket. I also felt that there needed to be another round of two of editing, some sentence structures were just jarring and felt wrong. I found myself constantly rewriting sentences in my head while reading because they just sounded off. This isn’t something that I like to do while trying to enjoy my books.
Evie hasn’t changed much, she’s still just trying her damn best and as badarse and snarky as usual, so I was happy about this. Though I do think she jumps to conclusions too fast, not giving others a change to actually explain their side of an event. This annoyed me. I get that she has her reasons, and I’m generally quite fond of a protagonist with flaws, but some of Evie’s grate on me. As for her protector lovers, they came across incredibly mopey and desperate in this instalment. This is not attractive to me. Azi stepped up a bit in this but he also came across as very desperate at times. The relationships haven’t really evolved much, except for Evie actually trusting the guys more, which I guess is a positive. Also, if you’re hoping for some steamy scenes in this one, you’ll be a bit disappointed. There’s a quick scene between Evie and one of the protectors, but considering it’s a reverse harem there’s actually not really any sex happening in this instalment. I didn’t mind this, I’m okay with character relationships developing before they get down and dirty, but I know that some people will be a bit disappointed if they go into this one thinking they’re going to be needing a cold shower afterwards.
The premise of the story is interesting, I found it to be super enjoyable if I’m honest. I love that we got more information about Evie’s lineage and history, this answered some questions left over from book 1. I also love where the story is heading, I’d be interested to see how it turns out. Even if it ends on a cliche, that’s okay, I’m not worried about that, I just want it written well.
I found the pacing in this one to be off. For such a short book, it took me around 3-4 days to finish it. A book of less than 200 pages… this isn’t a good thing in my eyes. There was stuff happening in the first half of the book, but it just came across as boring to me. The pacing picked up in the last quarter odd of the book, closer to the end. The action came thick and fast here and kept me interested. The beginning however, left a lot to be desired.
As much as I’d like to see how the series ends, unless Bailey’s writing evolves exponentially across the next two books, I doubt that I’ll carry on. The story is interesting enough to make me WANT to continue, but the writing just puts me off. I’d also like to point out that I have read another of Bailey’s books apart from this series, and I quite enjoyed it. I also have a couple from another series of hers on my kindle, and I am looking forward to reading them. So it’s not to say that Bailey is a bad author, she’s definitely anything but that. I just feel that the writing in this series isn’t as polished as I’d like it to be, therefore it’s not really my cup of tea.